legacy rp feedback thread

[Spider]

I usually read every roleplay every week so I'll drop my own personal views here. I encourage other to do the same. Afterall everyone likes to know that what they write is being viewed by more than them, their opponent, and management.


So I read Barmey Greens roleplay. Have to say to me it was the best I've read from him thus far. I liked the pointa you touched on in respect to not only your opponents but some of the other on going things in the company. Also liked the fact that you're seriously trying to work towards a title shot and not pulling any punches in your quest for that. The first scene was put together really well hotting many points as well as reitterating the fact that your coming up to the end of your career quickly put doing everything you can for one last 'hurrah'.

The second scene was ok. Coulda been better ani wasn't feeling the ending. You could have just end it with Green working the speed bag I just didn't think the last sentence or two was needed but that's just me nit picking. Overall a solid roleplay id like to see that level more from you. 8.1/10

[Spider]

Have to say I like the new dynamic to mckissck showing his humorous side. I did giggle a lil at his roleplay. It wasn't better or worse than any of your previous roleplays. Just different. Well put together. Adding in scientific names, golden. Keeping with that persona and not xhnaging back to Mckissck at any time to drop actual 'wrestler' match talk was also golden. It was overall well done. Once again good job. 7.8/10.

[Spider]

Solid overall Ziggler rp. Nothing to really speak on. Ziggler is sounding more like your own itteration of the character. I like that cause it makes him more unique to you rather than just a carbon copy of the WWE superstar. Nothing really tot ouch on, as I said a solid effort tocuhing on all points you needed to. 7.9/10

[BarneyGreen]

Holy crap. I impressed you. I think I am gonna fall through the floor or something. Thanks for the feedback.

[Spider]

I tried to read Eve's EP and as short as it was,  its absolute destruction of grammar was painstakingly hard to deal with. I believe it was my only copy and pasted from a previous role play, I do not believe English is this person's first language, and if so... wow. Unfortunately there is nothing that can be done to help you because you first need to know how to actually write before you can be assisted.

 My suggestion, stay in school.