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« on: May 07, 2013, 05:58:07 pm »

What does everything think of this new take on my RP

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« Reply #1 on: May 08, 2013, 02:37:11 pm »

Was an interesting piece of work loved every bit of it good job for a return rp.
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« Reply #2 on: May 08, 2013, 04:21:15 pm »

I'm not sure how you used to write, but this one was really well done. It came off as a little unstable and could be very dangerous in the right situations. This match is going to be good.
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« Reply #3 on: May 08, 2013, 06:16:43 pm »

I didn't get the reference at the end to jack smkrking or bob, so I can't say much about that. If you're going for the unstable angle I feel ya, if not then it lacks as a roleplay. The locations somewhat made sense, the only one that really made sense was the mental institution, but I think if you spent a lil more time on history in the institution bit it would have added strength to the roleplay. Though at the same time, if going for the unstable angle jumping from place like that does make sense.

I don't think the paragraph by Carr was needed. Due to the fact that it was all Jakob explaining where he was, why he came back, and what his plans are now against specifically The Legion, the paragraph would have had the same if not harder effect coming from Jakob.

Due to the fact I don't know exactly what you're going for I can only give a 7.5. If there was more to it to add clarity to a mental state then I could rate it higher. Though you didn't say whether or not the metal institution or anything else brought you clarity. You also talk about the 'little' you've accomplished in two years and leave it at that. Like no, anything about not letting another two years go by and doing a whole **** load more just I haven't done much, that's it.

I think you could have done a lot more with this roleplay. 7.5/10
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« Reply #4 on: May 08, 2013, 06:23:56 pm »

I didn't get the reference at the end to jack smkrking or bob, so I can't say much about that. If you're going for the unstable angle I feel ya, if not then it lacks as a roleplay. The locations somewhat made sense, the only one that really made sense was the mental institution, but I think if you spent a lil more time on history in the institution bit it would have added strength to the roleplay. Though at the same time, if going for the unstable angle jumping from place like that does make sense.

I don't think the paragraph by Carr was needed. Due to the fact that it was all Jakob explaining where he was, why he came back, and what his plans are now against specifically The Legion, the paragraph would have had the same if not harder effect coming from Jakob.

Due to the fact I don't know exactly what you're going for I can only give a 7.5. If there was more to it to add clarity to a mental state then I could rate it higher. Though you didn't say whether or not the metal institution or anything else brought you clarity. You also talk about the 'little' you've accomplished in two years and leave it at that. Like no, anything about not letting another two years go by and doing a whole **** load more just I haven't done much, that's it.

I think you could have done a lot more with this roleplay. 7.5/10
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« Reply #5 on: May 09, 2013, 04:05:18 am »

All right, there were a couple thing I noticed that Spider somewhat touched on, but truly this wasn't a bad RP at all.

The scene choice was a little weird to me. There wasn't really much need for the scene unless you totally wanted that DJ to add something into the RP. I just really wasn't feeling it and think the RP could've been more emotional had it been Hystaria collecting his thoughts in some backstage room or something.

Personality wise, this is still the Jakob I've seen grow since you first arrived. Sure it seemed a little choppy, but that's explainable after what you recently went through. So don't be too hard on yourself because I actually enjoyed Jakob going through his career and thinking about what he has accomplished (A triple crown in two years isn't bad at all!).

But like I said, there were just some things that seemed a little choppy to me. Such as when Jakob is talking about the things he's accomplished and then thinks 'Is that all I've done in two years?'. You built that up as if Jakob was going to realize something, like how this time around he'll make sure to do better than ever before or something. But it was just dropped in the next paragraph. It was like dangling a carrot in front of a rabbit then not giving it to him! Dammit man! Grin

I agree with Spider that I don't think that the scene with Carr was necessary. It was just too short to make that much of an impact, but I at least like to see the you're building up to a clash with The Legion. Maybe add a bit more from either guy to that scene and it'd be better.

And just one tiny last thing, I saw some minor grammar issues throughout the piece. Stuff like its/their. It's nothing major but it stops a reader like me. Maybe just give the RP a quick proofread before you post it? You should catch any choppy parts/grammar mistakes.

So all in all, apart from it being a little jumpy/choppy, I enjoyed this piece. I'm looking forward to Jakob's week and you definitely still have it there. 
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« Reply #6 on: May 09, 2013, 09:50:28 pm »

Call it rust or cobwebs, but they were definitely inhibiting the early parts of the roleplay, and it didn't really let it feel natural. It cleared up as it went on, though, which is a good sign, so nothing really to worry about.

It's disjointed, but seems to be designed that way deliberately, not a happy accident. Again, that's something that worked. However, one thing, is that with the whole "multiple scenes as one whole promo" thing that was going on, I think a little more needed to be done to emphasis that element, rather than the two or three shifts to larger exposition. Shorter, sharper bursts could've been more effective.

I'll agree that Carr seemed out of place. It's your return, your big change to make a RP all about you and what you're gonna do. FSU's stuff could've come later. I get you want to hype a Legion/FSU confrontation, but sometimes the slowburn is a lot more warming.
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