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« on: May 15, 2013, 03:00:58 pm »

Taking a cue from Spider, I figure I'll give some analysis on what I have read so far:

Spider's Rp
  - I like the way you set up both scenes.  In the first scene I like how you gave him that wise veteran style talking about the new young rookies. Also, how you jumped in and out of kayfabe as the character talking about his love for Spencer, as a fan.  The second part, I thought Spider went hard on Dolph and Jakob.  I felt how angry and fed up with some of the things they have been saying.  Nice edge to Spider I felt.  If I had to downgrade anything, it would probably be the talk about the match itself.  I think you stuck in the two out of three falls here and there but I felt you could have done a little bit more talking about this week's match.  Still I give a strong 7.75 to 7.8 rating.

Eve's Rp
  - I think the word that sums up what I read in your rp is, incorrect. Where did you write this rp, on your phone, microsoft word or what?  I know you're new so I'm not going to bash it, but too many mistakes.  It was short.  You completely botched noticing that Mark Jennings was a guy and not a girl.  I think you should maybe look around the boards, read a couple of our shows, or ask someone what exactly is going in the WWG.  It's a debut and I don't rate debuts, but there is work to be done.  You need to look at grammar, structure, speech, and other things.  You want your rp to come out like a page out of a book.  Happy help, just ask for it.

FTW's Rp
  - First off, have to say I love what you're doing with this group.  You obviously have complete grasp of both characters.  You had a good back and forth going on in this rp, which is good for a single handler tag team.  I think you touched on everything that you had to touch on, as far as last week's match and this week's match.  I didn't read to the song, so maybe I missed something important.  But I kind of felt like I was missing something.  I don't think I can take them seriously yet as competitors.  I don't get fighters when I read the rp.  Definately good though.  I'll rate 7.75, just because it's early and I want to see where it goes.
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« Reply #1 on: May 15, 2013, 07:17:06 pm »

Cheers, happy with that response. I'll work on bringing them into the fold as fighters, for now they're just young, cocky little shits that have that little weird edge to them. The song at the end is pretty unimportant, just Monty Python's Always Look on the Bright Side of Life, which is kind of a philosophy I think that Colt currently lives by, and a way to reference his attitude. By the time the big matches roll around I might start working in more of my traditional character aspects (i.e. characters portrayed as "warriors") but for now I want them to have a completely isolated identity from my usual roster.
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« Reply #2 on: May 18, 2013, 07:54:51 am »

Thanks for the feedback. The first week I dont ask I sti;; ge some lol. Thatnks for the rating too. I agree that my match talk shoulda been more. but I was torn between whethe to add it or end it after I siad what I was saying about my past. I kinda think I should ended it there but whats done is done.

Spider's not an angry guy but he'll speak on things that gripe him. And what Jakob said really got under his skin. Dolph just disappoints him as Spider (behind closed doors) expects more from Dolph and thinks hes selling himself short. It's probably due to how I feel about Dolph in real life. Not that's he's not doing his job, just that the WWE has been bitching him harder since he won the title. It's pretty disgusting as far as I'm concerned.
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