Feedback please.

[Derrick Trotter]

Hi guy's was wondering if you would be kind enough to give me some feedback on my very first Role Play here in WWG?

Here's the link for it any feedback would be great even if it's bad, I prefer bad feedback as it tends to motivate for rthe next one but if it's good then tell me that too.

http://wwg.smfforfree3.com/index.php/topic,16324.msg136349.html#new

Many thanks in advance.

Paul.

[The Wretched Nobody]

I can't honestly say I've ever read a character like that before.  I mean it's an entry rp, it's good for what it is - but no one can really expect him to be totally fleshed out and in depth just now.

I think for a "Hey how ya doing?" promo - it's well done, but what has me interested is the fact that as I said... I have never quite run into a character like him before which is nice.

[Derrick Trotter]

I trying to build him up week by week may be next week he might get a move set right or very close to getting it right. He has always been a clumsy sod so expect a little more of him falling through the ropes and stuff like that but he does get better you will have to wait and see.

[J-Dub]

Truly an amateur of amateurs lol. I love the comical appeal you bring. And the fact you want clumsy matches makes it fun to write about.

[Derrick Trotter]

Thanks J-Dub i get most of my idea's for this character from the actual show but sort of convert them into wrestling matters if that makes seance so that way I'm not copying anything it's like watching Youtube video's of matches or promos the stars do but in my case Only fools and horses. they have made so many shows i will be spoilt for choice with my role plays just hope I can make everyone laugh out loud when they read them.